
Deep Raptura
Well, this is the final battle, right?
The old woman has a sad past…!
It’s not that the “waitstaff uniform” was doing anything erotic… I was… disappointed.
I thought that doing something erotic and impactful would make it a topic of conversation, but…
The brothel bomb had an extremely bad reputation.
>>4
If all I’m told is the story without any erotic scenes, it just leaves a bad taste in my mouth…
>>5
If you had really gone all out with the LO, I would have repeatedly given you the highest rating…
>>42
I understand that you wanted to do it in LO because the art is good.
>>4
To be honest, the development is too sloppy…
Even after a night has passed, the publication order remains in its usual place.
It is hard to believe that it will go up given the recent developments.
Even if JUMP+ becomes more interesting when the rankings drop, it won’t get read, so the rankings won’t rise.
>>7
Especially for erotic content, it tends to be easily viewed at the beginning, but I think the content related to eunuchs will be tough.
>>8
Because that was really boring…
>>15
The story itself seems interesting, but the pacing is poor, and the main selling point, the charm of the three sisters, is… not so much…
>>8
As a eunuch, I definitely won’t go all the way until the end.
>>7
Kunigei is pretty interesting, though.
Suddenly revealing a character’s tragic past and thinking it deepens their persona should be banned by rule.
On Monday, while Drama Queen and Kenturia are solidifying their position at the top, Red Cat is strengthening the sidelines. Although it’s biweekly, the dominance of the absolute champion Spy makes the competition too thick.
What were those guerrilla groups, I wonder?
I like lycopene, but it has stabilized downwards.
In the first place, it’s the ones that Kenturia progressed through as the challengers…
People who lack the ability to structure stories well enough to draw countless manga.
An example of a series that was published based solely on a single impactful moment.
There’s nothing particularly surprising.
This was above Kenturia, right?
It’s a turn where we’re skipping the proper development and just talking about the setting…
I don’t really understand things like composition, but I can tell that you just think it’s okay to do cruel things.
If you’re aiming for first place even as a burglar, I think it might be Thursday when there’s no one around.
The steering after killing my father was the worst.
It felt like the story’s structure was just poorly done and that became evident halfway through.
I was surprised to see how quickly I discarded the strong parts.
>>25
It can’t be helped.
What I want to do isn’t about the strengths.
>>25
It’s pretty amazing how a character’s charm gradually diminishes.
Seriously, I’m not thinking about anything ahead at all.
>>24
You should also construct your sentences properly.
A flashy battle scene with a big pawn!
If you want to be popular on Jump Plus, this is it.
>>27
It’s a matter of having drawing skills and being able to depict action scenes.
I honestly think it will be a tough battle because my rivals are getting stronger.
>>27
Monsters are kind of like that too.
>>27
The part about the monster being well-received might not be very important.
…But it seems strange because, looking at the comments, it doesn’t seem to be well-received.
I feel a lack of interest in female characters.
“I like the suggestion of being a sex slave like ‘If I can’t show results before my period comes…'”
Other than that, um.
Many readers questioned, “Isn’t it a one-shot in episode 1?!” but would it have been better as a one-shot…?
Before thinking about the story or anything else, just stopping the tendency to throw in purely sensational developments without considering the consequences is seriously needed.
In terms of other relatively new series, Arata seems very tough personally, but I wonder what the public thinks.
I can somewhat accept the part where they killed their parents, but the aftermath is just too careless.
>>41
Fools say this a lot, don’t they?
It’s the same as saying something about deducting points.
It’s just generalizing what I interpret on my own.
If you want to tell a story like this, I think it would have been better to emphasize a more vicious and harsh realistic route from the very beginning.
I liked this week’s content.
But it doesn’t match at all with the goodness of episode 1.
>>43
The sad present I face as I was hoping for a rom-com between an AI and a boy───
My father was killed, my mother went insane, the family fell apart, my classmates were turned into sexual objects, and I have a sad past with enemies.
>>45
The protagonist has been in a daze the whole time.
>>52
The protagonist has been doing nothing all along, right?
>>52
The part where the protagonist’s unnaturalness is revealed was just trying to show their innocence in the “prostitute bomb” plot…
The art is good, so if it gets a good original work, it will probably transform.
I thought the storyline was firmly established at the point when the father was killed, but…
The fact that the “father-killing” and the fundamental issues surrounding it haven’t received much attention is a bit concerning.
I didn’t know this was still going on…
If you showed the monster nature of Rapta and created an impact, I think you should have just run through without any hesitation.
It’s impossible to steer towards fighting the evil organization with Lapta as an ally from there.
If it gets interesting, it feels like I should just start reading from the middle.
It’s tough if you don’t make me read from the beginning.
Alice’s admired person (among them, a god) has become a ridiculously stupid idiot who plays things like “prostitute bombs,” but is that really okay?
The protagonist’s thought process lacks human qualities, so the twist could be that the protagonist was an AI.
Since it went viral with “Buchii!”, we have to go in that direction, right…?
The prostitute bomb is too weak and has a poor cost-performance ratio.
The lack of appeal in the allied organization is a problem.
>>62
Don’t say it as if it’s on the enemy’s side.
I have to do something… I’ve never seen a protagonist who does nothing.
The hook of the first episode was exceptionally good, so why is that?
I wonder what was missing to pull it along like Takopi in the future.
>>66
I think if it had dragged on over there, it would have turned out like this.
It’s impressive that you finished it properly and briefly.
The premise of a war AI falling in love with a boy was incredibly good.
Neither the enemies, allies, nor the protagonist have charm, you know.
It seemed that making the protagonist an AI slayer would have given the story much more structure.
At first, I really, really liked it…
I liked you…
It’s impressive that there has been no romantic comedy element at all up to this point from the content of the first chapter.
Sayama-chan’s brainwashing rape was just a pointless harassment, it’s really pathetic.
>>73
Moreover, it does not linger, especially the tail.
This is still understandable in terms of possessiveness.
>>77
This is crazy.
I’m seriously only thinking about making it a malicious development, and I have no reason to consider what happens afterward.
>>73
Because you did that first, my sad past feels faint.
>>78
What they’ve done is so extreme and outrageous that I can’t sympathize with them at all.
It makes no sense to become a pet of those who bear a grudge and lash out at unrelated people.
>>73
It’s kind of scary how the reactions from those around are so faint over there.
>>73
If interpreted very favorably, it could be seen as a warning shot, suggesting that next time, we could prepare something lethal and target not just you guys, which could be understood as forcing them to act on a somewhat haphazard plan.
It’s more like between the lines, or rather a realm of delusion, but…
It’s rare to have a protagonist that you can’t empathize with this much.
It’s a bit strange to have no sexual knowledge even in the upper grades.
A template of a bad wealthy organization’s should not be carelessly revealed…
It seems like Kei-kun has a sad past and present…
>>76
Now that you mention it, that’s true.
>>76
I was just playing games, but my father died, my mother broke down, and my classmates became strange…
Just draw big boobs.
The author probably likes provocative developments like those in old erotic games.
It’s strange how Kei seems so carefree even though he’s in a state where he can’t expect anything from life going forward.
Very strange.
In the beginning, there were often threads created…
Aren’t you using that for the students at school?
You said that night is more enjoyable on page 8.
I was looking for a slightly risqué slapstick comedy with Sayama-chan, Raputa, and the main character.
>>89
Personally, I was hoping for my father to die.
>>99
…Huh, is it going in that direction? Well, if it becomes interesting…
That’s what happened.
It didn’t become interesting.
>>102
To be honest, there wasn’t really a necessity for the protagonist’s family situation to become so chaotic.
>>89
I really don’t understand why they discarded such a delicious development like Raptor possession for Sayama-chan.
The protagonist is too psycho for me to like.
I won’t forgive them for putting Sayama through such an ordeal!
I’m glad to be protected! I’m here to help you now!
What the author wants to write should be shota, but even that shota has some kind of strange design like what is this…
The story is rough, but the art is beautiful, isn’t it?
>>94
I want you to become a machine that has no ego and just draws because the art is truly great.
The father’s death has a strong impact, but it seems that the story could expand with a supernatural tightrope love comedy and powerful hacking.
It feels like I started rolling down a slope and ended up dead right after I killed my father.
I can’t help but pull away when it gets to that point; it’s something I wouldn’t read anymore.
It’s strange how everyone has a big-picture view, isn’t it?
There isn’t anyone like Usopp, whether in a good way or a bad way…
That kid is just a classmate to the protagonist.
Not an important person or anything.
>>100
Isn’t that position too weak to use as a whore bomb to shake the protagonist’s mentality?
I was weak…
>>104
It’s not harassment towards the protagonist, but rather a woman who sees the protagonist in a lewd way, so forgive her.
The prostitute bomb had an incredible impact and was great because I could use it for my erotic fantasies.
But I thought it was ruined that they managed to get rescued after such an explosion in the main story!
I feel a bit deflated because there was no result after holding it over the week.
Sayama has been bombed!?!
I see.
I think that if a classmate ended up in such a situation, a normal child would be much more confused…
>>108
Even if he’s confessed to being an “Oedipus,” he’s the kind of boy who feels he has to correct the AI in front of him in a positive way, so his mentality is different…
There are a lot of things I want to do as it gets more recent, but I feel like I’m not able to express them…
I’ve been focusing too much on the setup; I should have continued to solidify it a bit more before moving forward with the drawing.
I thought it would be a romantic comedy, but it takes a strange turn, a Jump Plus manga.
I want Cambrian Makim to keep doing romantic comedy forever.
>>111
The sincere heartbeat was dead and it didn’t work.
After all, brainwashing plots are only acceptable in battle and erotic manga!!!
>>111
It’s been quite a while since it became a sort of title fraud, in a way…
It’s amusing that the issue of the “prostitute bomb” has become so taboo that we can’t even talk about it in public.
I don’t think that elementary school student rape will be accepted in society.
What is SEX? Since it’s a pure shota, the sense of despair doesn’t come through and it doesn’t drag you down, which is logically consistent, but the gap with what I’m reading is quite significant…
But it’s useful that this protagonist is just so childish that he notices his own one-man sumo!
>>117
It’s not interesting, so I can’t use it…
It’s impossible for elementary school students nowadays not to know anything about sexual matters at all…
It would have been nice if it had developed like the story of the tanuki’s wedding, with this and that happening!
Ever since my father passed away, I’ve become strange.
I wish there had been more romantic comedies with AI girls and little boys.
A mental state that can forgive the murder of one’s father is not normal.
Putting the overall story aside, if we extract some settings and situations, it seems that there are quite good materials available!
>>125
The ability to summarize and cook it is lacking too much…
I want you to carefully describe the process of making more prostitute bombs.
It’s terrible that the people from Hacker Village are not at all worried about Sayama, who was completely messed up, just saying, “Whoa, AI is really scary.”
There were also parents with children in that village.
I really loved the early part of “Mago Heart Scramble,” but it got completely messed up after the senior appeared.
>>128
That author seems to be struggling…
>>146
A little while ago, there was news about a manga artist from my hometown being interviewed!
>>128
Since Senpai left, the view count has obviously dropped, hasn’t it?
And then, suddenly, the senior becomes a good person.
>>152
Once it’s been put out, there’s no way to recover from it…
>>128
I guess it was no good even though rivals are interesting…
>>168
I haven’t read that part… I dropped out before that.
It’s clear that girls who like cute things and handsome guys don’t like “shota” (young boys).
If you’re going to depict such a disjointed rape scene, it should be described in a much more detailed way, my little friend is telling me.
Calculate how much is left based on the number of chapters needed for the next volume.
>>133
It’s a common occurrence in Jump to end at volume 4, right?
The reader of Light: “Ah! It’s because those who can’t tell reality from fiction keep complaining that it’s been canceled!”
The hookers bomb was quite counter-trending, but recently even that…
>>135
Because after such a sensational development, I thought it would get really interesting, but this is what we have…
Underage rape is barely on the limits of what Jump Plus can handle, even as a hint.
>>137
Then don’t show it…
This time there was also a severed head, but it wasn’t particularly shocking or anything.
Even the enemy has a sad past… It’s getting exciting!
Siren-chan, who loves Nori but is almost always at the bottom on Mondays…
>>142
I also like Siren-chan, but it feels like it doesn’t fit well in Jump Plus because it has a strong shoujo manga vibe.
It seems to be a good match for a lot of teenage fantasy.
>>142
It started right away with the battle, and it’s certain that there will be battles in the future too…
>>153
I was prepared since it was labeled as a battle comedy from the first episode.
Even though you presented something like a stupid setting that even a dumb erotic manga wouldn’t use, like a “prostitute bomb.”
I really don’t understand what they were trying to achieve by only destroying the bathroom door with no human casualties.
>>143
I thought Keikun was in danger, but it turns out that wasn’t the case, which is a bit confusing.
It’s getting exciting!
Kenturia
Sayama-chan can cry over the way Keikun treats her more than being turned into a bomb.
I hadn’t read it.
I thought it would be easy to explain the story of the big breasts glasses this time! But maybe it’s my fault…
>>151
It’s really hard to concentrate on it, isn’t it?
When Sayama-chan appears, it becomes a hot topic, right?
I don’t think we need to analyze or read between the lines of a manga where brainwashing can happen with jumbled signals, and guerrilla support groups are openly active, and there’s no explanation for going from Japan to the Arctic!
>>157
This week, a mysterious new cult village (destroyed) has also appeared!
I thought there might be mental damage, but it seems there is none, just a prostitute bomb.
I will bring back to life the person I admired immensely who was killed.
The enemy’s reasons are also quite lame.
>>162
I don’t really understand why you don’t seek revenge on that enemy first…
The taste for sensationalism was evident since the one-shot, but it wasn’t bad.
When it becomes a series, it turns out that it’s the type that can’t hide the flaws in the story; the editing is bad.
When the equipment is abundant, the adventure without clothes disappears. Which way is tomorrow without clothes?
It’s a bomb that only burns the skin, so it seems that the explosion blew the toilet away due to the shock of the water spout.
>>166
Isn’t the positional relationship strange in that case…?
It might be just right to draw something that feels like BL in a one-shot.
Oversleeping, sincere feelings, and thread images all turned out to be different from what I had been thinking… it became a manga.
>>169
Since oversleeping has unleashed a formidable enemy, the only option now is to slip in some romantic comedy in between.
I suddenly received a head as a gift and couldn’t help but laugh.
I laughed because I was made to do regular maid work.
What is the meaning of giving a severed head as a gift, just like with a prostitute bomb? It makes you wonder.
It seems that the style is one where situations I want to draw come first, and I haven’t thought much about the rest.
Mako’s scramble is really ridiculous how they are acting unrelated to this incident when it’s all because of their senpai…
At first, I thought an interesting manga had started.
Why did it end up like this?
It’s acceptable to kill Rapta Original-chan for confidentiality, but it’s ridiculous to massacre an entire clan and abduct them without knowing if they have any talent—if they lack talent, they become slaves. Are European investors that bored?
Romantic comedies are hot for me right now because of Ghost Fixer…
Since the doctor has the ability to brainwash anyone, why not take revenge on the organization with that first…?
Why have you been kept around all this time?
It’s fine to introduce a bad character, but if they don’t face any consequences, it becomes uncomfortable and stressful for the reader.
>>181
When that kind of thing is constantly featured as the main focus in a work, it really makes me lose the desire to read.
The stable Cambrian pasture is amazing.
Even though I’m supposed to be talking as if I’m letting Kei-kun hear it, I can’t help but think there’s no way he can understand this…
>>184
I couldn’t understand it either… the meaning of talking about the past and the reason why Kei-kun is necessary…
From the moment I heard “sincerity,” I thought, “Is that what a ninja is?”
It might have been better if I had been able to cooperate with the ninja to protect the heroine from my seniors…
>>185
I wonder if the bodyguard is acting useless on purpose.
What I thought while reading was that I wanted the terrible character to be treated terribly within the story as well.
It’s really amazing that the incredibly vicious prostitute bomb is going to be nerfed into a firecracker in the next story.
>>187
That’s definitely because they received criticism beyond what they could have imagined.
The depiction and the effects are completely unbalanced.
I wasn’t particularly interested in your past.
The Cambrian period is stabilizing, and we are in a position where we can end it at any time.
I thought the story about Magokoro having some trouble with her senior would continue for a while.
Before even apologizing, everyone interacted normally, and it just felt off…
If I had just kept doing things like prostitute bombs, reverse rape by the doctor, or Horie-erotic, I could have burst through as Jinki of Jumpla.
>>194
Teacher Horie is trying to express maximum libido as naturally as possible, but since I’m pushing the conversation forward with a specific scenario in mind, I can’t quite get into it…
There are many characters who are like, “This jerk has a good heart!” but they don’t suffer any consequences…
There was a time when someone who was really enthusiastic about spreading the word suddenly stopped bringing it up.
>>197
Well, it can’t be helped…
Kei-kun, who was kicked by a strange woman he met for the first time, is in a sad situation now…
I thought I would be free from my senpai at the overnight event! But then I wondered if it was really sane for my senpai to show up.
There are levels of brainwashing ability that are rarely found even in modern erotic manga, and whether they can be used or not depends on the situation.
Is there any nourishment that can only be obtained from this slightly thrown-off feeling?
I wonder if it led to a more extreme direction because I got a reaction after killing the old man as a boost.
It seems I’ll be called “the prostitute bomb” from now on.
There were quite a few threads right after my dad died.